成考英語(yǔ)作文:2015年湖北卷寫作一
來(lái)源:m.ycmark.com 時(shí)間:2021-01-13 15:06:00 作者:山東成人高考
一、2015年湖北卷真題回放
請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示,并結(jié)合具體事例,用英語(yǔ)寫一篇短文。
Questioning is a bridge to learning. When you begin to doubt something and search for an answer, you will learn.
注意:1.無(wú)須寫標(biāo)題;2.除詩(shī)歌外,文體不限;3.內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合你生活中的具體事例;4.文中不得透露個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱;5.詞數(shù)不少于120,如引用提示語(yǔ)則不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。(滿分30分)
Seeing is believing①.Never believe in anything in a hurry before you make a careful research.
From childhood,I was told the saying the great fish eat up the small. I had been taking it for granted until one day when I knew the saying is not always right②.Last year, my father bought me a pet fish as my birthday present with some shrimps as its food.I kept them together in the fish tank, watching them swimming free and happy③.However, later in the afternoon,I was surprised to find it was the fish that was dying. And the killers, the shrimps were chewing on the body④!
So we should have the courage to question,and on no account should we follow anyone like sheep. The more we question, the more we will learn⑤.
二、解析:
①Seeing is believing以言語(yǔ)開啟論述,有統(tǒng)領(lǐng)全文之效,不僅簡(jiǎn)潔明確,且貼合所給材料主旨,十分恰當(dāng)。作者語(yǔ)言組織和構(gòu)思能力可見一斑。
②been taking完成進(jìn)行時(shí),表示過(guò)去相信,至今仍相信,運(yùn)用準(zhǔn)確恰當(dāng),表達(dá)相當(dāng)完美。when引導(dǎo)了一個(gè)時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句,復(fù)雜句式也是亮點(diǎn)之一。
③watching現(xiàn)在分詞表狀態(tài),作者請(qǐng)熟各種高級(jí)表達(dá)方式,文章鮮活生動(dòng),充滿動(dòng)感。
④and the killer置于句首,不僅過(guò)渡自然,且有突出口吻,加強(qiáng)語(yǔ)氣之效。
⑤the more...,the more... 語(yǔ)句簡(jiǎn)潔,表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確,說(shuō)服力強(qiáng)。該句呼應(yīng)段首觀點(diǎn),非常完美地闡述了文章觀點(diǎn)。
三、名師點(diǎn)評(píng)
本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊,條理清晰,論據(jù)充分,頗具說(shuō)服力。行文中語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔,直觀明了,表達(dá)方式多樣。作者在行文過(guò)程中熟練使用了高級(jí)詞匯和多個(gè)高級(jí)句式,加上長(zhǎng)短句的搭配,文章錯(cuò)落有致,韻味十足,語(yǔ)言的表達(dá)效果得以體現(xiàn)。末段用一句話總結(jié)、重申了質(zhì)疑在學(xué)習(xí)中的重要作用,完美印證了論點(diǎn)。高級(jí)詞匯的恰當(dāng)運(yùn)用,有效提升了文章的得分檔次??傊?綜合多方面因素,本篇都不愧為一篇值得學(xué)習(xí)和借鑒的好文。
四、譯文
眼見為實(shí)!在認(rèn)真研究之前,不要急于相信任何事情。
從小就有人告訴我,大魚吃小魚。我一直認(rèn)為這是理所當(dāng)然的,直到有一天我知道這句話并不總是正確的。去年,爸爸給我買了一條寵物魚作為我的生日禮物,一些蝦作為它的食物。我把它們放在魚缸里,看著它們自由自在地游著。然而,下午晚些時(shí)候,我驚奇地發(fā)現(xiàn)快死的是那條魚。而兇手就是那些蝦米,卻在撕咬魚!
所以我們應(yīng)該有勇氣去質(zhì)疑,決不應(yīng)該像羊一樣盲目跟隨任何人。我們問(wèn)的越多,收獲越多。
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